what are you?? seriously!! I could have never related something like that's in the pic to the kind of lines you've written!!ji, tussi great ho!! :| :)See you when I see you... :)
muje hindi nahi ati hai :P..translate pls :P.urs..hemu..
kya baat hai...
seriously nice yar :)
too good hai ji! :)
heylo woman! m back ;Poh n poem is niiiiiice!
the only thoughts I had were....Im hungry.need new t shirt.sorry, Im self centered.:Pnicely done, the post.
:O abe ...itni bhayanak hindi kahan si sikhi :Omeri hindi bahut kamjor hai ...sikha de yaar :Pwaise tuney likhi hai poem toh acchi he hogi :D
"gagri teri chalti jay " :)
the idea behind the poem is good..gr8 job..however the critic inside me couldn't resist observing a few scopes for improvement. Have listed them below:1. Not sure if 'chhalti' is the right word..chhalna means dhokha dena...i guess u wanted to use 'chhalakti' 2. On reading the first line, i felt a tinge of uneasiness. "boond pade jo pani ki". Now even if i dint have the pic for reference, the following lines wud easily have told me that its paani....rather than telling that its a paani ki boond, the line can be beautified by giving the boond an adjective...jus an opinion..3. the two lines ending with 'me' in between cud have been avoided..they break the flow of poem..how bout - "rookhe pag jo badhte jaayeinsookhi dharti ki pyaas bujhaaye"
oh my god !i'm in love with your blog and your writing! It's great re!:)Keep it up!
@ pranavaare kaha yaarr..jyada tarif an kar..mein udne lagungi.. :Pshukriya
@ hemzzarre yarr...kitni mehnat karni padegi..
@ amirtathank you dear
@ prakharbohot bohot dhanyawaad
@ tinnigood to see you back :Dand thanks
@ deludedand you are giving me new names.french toast...french fries:Pthanx
@ pinkumother tounge hai be hindi...itni toh aati haitujhe seekhna hai..chal mil online aaj se classes shuru:P
@ i'l try to be truthful:):):)
@ digantthank you..trying my hands on hindi nowadays
@ cursedaww thanku soo much..
@ shashanknow this is very nice to see some critics..this is gona help me to improvewill be wrking on it again
Gal.... This reminded me of a story I read way back in my text book. It was named 'Rampur ki Agamjani'(If I still remember it correctly)... very nice piece of work... the important thing is that u have highlighted idea behind it well... :)
Yeh badhiya hai.... Nicely done. Kaise likhti hai re yeh sab?? Sahi hai ekdum :) :)
nice pic ....u know after so much days i again get in touch with kind of hardcore hindi.... and i really feel good to see some original work from a creative friend....keep smiling and keep rocking,sid....
@ smritipata nai kaisa likhti hu..bas ho jata hai:)
@ sidpata hai hindi likhne ka alag hi feel hai yaarhindi literature aur writings bohot hi valuable hai yaarr
may be ho sakta hai....par apna to jaise hindi se nata hi toot gaya hoon.....aajkal to newspaper bhi angrazi hi padhte hai....
@ sidhaan badi vidambana haiaapni matrabhasha hai hindi soch
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